Your essay is quite interesting and informative with a discussion about Very High Temperature Reactor (VHTR), which can be used to replace fossil fuels. Because of a clear thesis statement, I can easily recognize your main points in this essay.
In body paragraphs, there are many relevant and logical reasons used to support your ideas and most of them are logical. These supporting information are very useful; thank to them, I knew more about the positive advantages of VHTR. However, I did not recognize any counterclaim and rebuttal in your essay. So, you should use some counterclaim to strengthen your points of view and persuade readers. In addition, you also should use more transitional words to link all ideas smoothly so that your essay will be clearer. You also did not use any citation. Some citation quoted from articles of famous journals or researchers may make your essay become more persuasive.
Generally, thank to this essay, I knew more about nuclear reactor and this is an useful information. Your writing is quite interesting and if you fix some small mistakes, it could be a good essay.
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Hey Michael,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comments. You may be right about the counter claim and the rebuttal in my essay. Even when i read my essay again, i didn't have a very solid counter claim. I'll do so for the final one.
Finding the citation was a little difficult because not much research can be found regarding the VHTR. Which explains why my essay doesn't have much citation.
Thank you once again for the comments and for spending your time to read my essay.
cheers